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Re: Young Lady of the Moon
You gave me great vibes, once, Young lady of the moon. Every night when you were out I gazed at the starry sky, And there you were, just hanging Like ...
Aug 20, 2010 -
Re: The Insomniacs Dream
Firstly, here's a few spelling/grammatical corrections: I've kinda had this sitting around waiting to be finished for a while and just finished it, so, tell me what you think... In ...
Aug 20, 2010 -
Re: Poetry is... v.2
I feel a bit naughty posting this so soon after my first version of it, but what can I say? I'm eager. Basically, I took the original and just extended ...
Aug 18, 2010 -
Re: Ticking Heart, Beating Clock
Hi, I'm not sure if this was intentional or not, but the punctuation at the end of each line was irregularly distitributed. In fact, it was barely existent. Personally I ...
Aug 18, 2010 -
Re: A Soul To The Heavens
Hi, This was a really nice read. I do agree to an extent with storyweaver that you probably shouldn't rely too much on a rhyme scheme. However, I think it ...
Aug 17, 2010 -
Re: Poetry is...
Poetry is life, and life is poetry. Poetry is uttered from the mouth, and from the mouth poetry utters. Poetry is read by you, and you are read by poetry. ...
Aug 17, 2010 -
Re: My 'friends'
I think most people can probably identify with this. When a person knows a friend for a long period of time, they begin to expect things of them, they attach ...
Aug 16, 2010 -
Re: The Poisonous Apple
Hello, This was good, but I couldn't help notice the number of syllables in each line; it is usually ten, but occasionally I found some lines with nine or eleven ...
Aug 16, 2010 -
Re: Help me mummy
Hello, I'm assuming this is about World War 2, and more specifically about D-Day? It's good, I don't have a lot to criticise, but you mentioned 'protect the Queen' somewhere; ...
Aug 16, 2010 -
Re: Sorry
I liked this poem. I just wished you capitalized it's one of my pet peeves. Lower-case letters at the beginning of sentences can be disconcerting, but if you look at ...
Aug 16, 2010 -
Re: Spooky
Fair points. This wasn't a serious attempt at a 'good poem' (as if bad poetry can actually exist), so I wasn't expecting much praise. This was also experimental in its ...
Aug 16, 2010 -
Re: Spooky
The Cosmos is fond of coincidence And that is why we’re here. If there’s a one in a billion chance Of a planet bearing life And there are billions Upon ...
Aug 16, 2010 -
Re: Sorry
The short lines of this poem are quite peculiar. At first, I thought it was a bit silly, but actually I think it works quite well with the subject matter; ...
Aug 16, 2010 -
Re: "But an old friend"
Hello, Luckily for you I prefer complimenting people to destroying their self-esteem, so here goes: I found this poem quite powerful as an expression of the pain and loss of ...
Aug 15, 2010 -
Re: Mr. Solomius' Tasks
Rathal "So...what do you need me to do?" Rathal asked. Melissa gave him an 'isn't it obvious?' look. "Just follow me and I'll tell you what to do when necessary." ...
Sep 13, 2009
